True Love, At The Dagger's Plunge

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Under the azure heavens he stood, his feet placed upon a dark stone, overlooking the entire glade. An emerald sea of tree-tops stretched before him, the rustling leaves like crashing and roaring waves. There was a soft, cool breeze all about him, tousling his brown hair. Yet, even such soothing beauty could not ease his pain, for he just stood in the wind, lost in his thought to cherish the agony. 3

He opened his eyes, a tear dripping from his lash to trail a stain down his cheek. The place only increased his grief – it had been the place where he had first kissed her. First held her hand. First touched her skin. He did not know why he kept coming back - it was merely self torture. He imagined her again, with her glowing cheeks flushed with joy and those big, brown eyes that lit his palms on fire. 4

A little away from his, was a little black stone. Upon it, scrawled was a little heart, faded now, but still visible. They had carved it together. He relished those memories. Him running his fingers through her raven hair. Her laugh echoing across the glade like a mirthful song. These were the times when he felt like curling into a ball and weeping himself to sleep. 5

Their relationship had been so beautiful, so peaceful. It was a crystal marriage, a pure passion, yet even so, it was hard to believe it all went wrong. It was hard to sink into the fact that she was gone. She was never coming back to him. 6

He looked at the beauteous land all around him, and wondered if it too, would one day suffer the same fate. He had now come to believe that love’s salvation was in its own destruction. Its own death brought it to its true status. It was only at loss, that one felt love, not before it. The tingling sensation, the lost hunger, it was nothing. Just an appetizer of what was to come. 7

He still found it hard to understand, how such beautiful things must be destroyed. Every relationship had to have an end, and only through the end, could the relation get stronger. It made sense, but it did not. It seemed that the plans of the universe were flawed; the rules were cruel – almost inhumane. 8

The man walked down the path, stepping over his own footsteps, engraved upon the soil, one of the few things that deemed immortality, a stain of his love and existence. He could see her footsteps too, small and fragile and he remembered how they used to run barefoot along the ground, laughing away to the singing wind. 9

As he walked along the forlorn path, he became engrossed at what lay before him. The brook that flowed from an unknown origin, coming down towards the feet of the valley, babbled in his sight. It was her favorite element – water. So tranquil, so beautiful, but he guessed one day it would dry up and all that would remain, was a mud-caked chasm. 10

As for him and her, their footsteps had gone astray, one above and one to trail downwards, both trapped in an inescapable prison – that of love.11

I am his shadow and I do what I must: imitate, follow, watch like a silent companion through his grief. I just hope he finds shelter in hope, because love is light and love is darkness, it just matters on how you see it. Though maybe the man is right, because one-day rain will come, and the little heart he made upon the stone will wash away …
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  • Now I have to say that I quite envy your writing skills. You wrote this at my age now, and I can't write half as well.

    I'mm looking forward to the day you become a famous writer. Trust me, it'll happen.

    This was heartbreaking and bittersweet and beautiful. I love the depth of it.

    Amazing once again.

    Oh...I just realized I commented on it already. I knew it sounded weirdly familiar. Ah well, I did not mind reading it again.


  • lavanya
    August 9

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    Beautiful story Asfend,

    I simply love the depth of this story and this para took my breath away

    "I am his shadow and I do what I must: imitate, follow, watch like a silent companion through his grief. I just hope he finds shelter in hope, because love is light and love is darkness, it just matters on how you see it. Though maybe the man is right, because one-day rain will come, and the little heart he made upon the stone will wash away "

    these words are so piercing they touched my inner being and left me with tears in my eyes...i must say this i s so beautiful story.

    good luck Asfend.

  • This is really cool, a little tear might have dripped out of my eye but that all i swear *crosses her fingers* lol


  • codename
    July 12
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    that was very emotional full with such strong detail great work.

  • awww this made me cry! i could see every thing so clearly as i read and this is just amazing!

    Great Job!

    Raven

  • I honestly wanted to cry when i read this! It is so heart wrenchingly beautiful, that people need to cry when reading this to get its full extent. This is REALLY good, it was not what I thought it would be. All the gold trophies you got were well deserved. Lovely written, keep up the good work.


    • Asfand
      July 10
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      Thank you very much! I'm glad you took the time to read, comment and applaud! I'm glad you like it too!

  • Marvelously written

    It was a beautiful piece, full of sorrow and sadness.
    You did a wonderful job with the descriptions and captured them all perfectly.

    It was a stunning read.

  • I really liked this story and I loved how you described what was happening. It was very well written and I would be glad to read more of your work. Good job and thanx for entering my contest


  • HengmanL
    March 2
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    Beautiful


  • Kari gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    This was really well done. I think that overall you've done great, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!


  • Freak--My Lable
    November 7, 2007
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    great descriptions!!!!!! Its easy to picture this.


  • Maui Jane silver member
    September 20, 2007

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    fan-tabulous (my own adjective) descriptions! This is excellent storytelling. The background was very well described - it is just so easy to picture this mentally.
    Great job!


  • angel.of.mine
    September 18, 2007

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    aww thats so sad!! AND SWWEEET and sadd *sniff sniff* u mada me cry.. no story has made me cry b4 it really makes you think tho every relationship has to end sometime.. *sigh* i really love this!! thank u so much for entering !!!


  • JuliaAlexandrovna
    September 3, 2007
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    I don't understand the beginning of your last paragraph.

    You made me cry again. I can relate to this.

    When I saw what song it was inspired by, I started singing the lyrics and the part I was singing is the one in your author's notes lol. I love the song, but this story gives it a whole new meaning for me. I love it ^^

    x Julez


  • Frozen Angel
    September 1, 2007

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    This is fantastic. The description you put in is just so amazing! Thanks so much for entering my contest!

    *Frozen Angel*

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