See the moon
painting you
talking through
your beauty so true
take my hand
destroy contraband
kill whats left
take the last stand
how can i feel without you
even through all the things you made me do
kissing death through the bitter wind
breaking away from you
you let me go
into the ground
no tears wept
the sound not kept
how can i feel without you
painting through the waters blue
waves coming unto me
drowning thee
take me away
into the faith
do you hate the taste
of my love
how can i feel without you
drowning inside the waters blue
turning red before it comes to you
haunting what i made you do
breaking everything that was me
was it true or just a dream
i was the one who only tried to love you
so do you read this darkened theme
destroy what you made of me
what i tried and what you made me be
tears fall from the sky
though not from you when i took my life
how can i feel without you
without your love in the winter bloom
drying my tears of loneliness
and taking my fears for you were my goddess
snow melts in the brightening sun
heading forward into the darkness alone
without you i shall always be
dead inside and broken and unseen
Author notes
A dream I had last night made me write this. In the dream it wasn't told to me but i felt as if i had lost the person i am currently in love with (midnightmare) and i wrote this as if i had lost her. there is another part to come
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow nicely done. You write so nicely. Captlise the "I's" and thats about the only problem with it. Other then that its really nice. Written from a dream about the one you love so nicely and worded wonderfully. The words in this show that you interperated it well and it really seems as though you lost someone.
From reading your works I do not understand why you think that you do not write well.
Anyway keep up the great work (yes great).
Emma
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This is really sweet, not much else but that to say. A dream can be interpered in many ways, we can only hope that this one turns out to be nothihg but that.
One thing my mum has told me, never say write or do whatever happens in a Friday night dream, too much of a chance this could come true.
Goodluck, and I look forward to the next part. Hope things turn out for the best for you and midnightmare.
~Ebb.
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I like it... it is deep and emotional and personal
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