It's a long way down from where you stand. Do you really want to do it?
Tears, no. Torrents flee from eyes rendered useless in the thrashing flood. You aren't even sure how close you are to the edge. Some would say you're unaware. At least you aren't ignorant
Would it be ok if you took just one step? Really, that's the difference between 'alive' and 'dead'. No-one would ever know if you meant to leap... or not. The present darkness enveloping your vision impairs everything - Sight, judgement, reality. It could be ascertained that you slipped. But you wouldn't be her to prove it...
Long russet hair is enthralled by the wind, jumping, swaying in the current; strewn across your face. It's ok, no-one can see your streaming, swollen, mascara-bleeding eyes. Then again, no-one can see your soul. They can feel it, though. They feel it only sometimes, when you let the world impress itself upon you. Despite the pain, we all need to feel and remember we're human. The ablity to do that was lost, wasn't it? The same way you lost yourself, your love, your passion.
It's a long way down from where you stand. Do you really want to do it?
It's just a single step. Pretend you're flying.
Author notes
A bit philosophical. It's not just about questioning suicide, but questioning motives, what sorts of things we value, what really matters to us as human beings - the human 'condition'.
I find it all very intersting stuff.
Hopefully you understand the depth I was aiming at, if not though, enjoy
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i thought that was very...well i loved it. i thought that it was short and put a lot of stuff into such a short thing. great job. very insightfull and i felt it was beautiful. that you so much for enter my contest and good luck!!
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Shelly... A friend sent me a quote before, it goes "WHat you risk reveals what you value." Your piece reminded me so much of that.. but the beauty of your writing is that I know, when I look back at it, the same words would hold such a different meaning, and tell me some other tale. I read it once, and as I read, I could already see 2 meanings - one suicidal, and the other, a figurative one
THanks so much for this and I wish you luck with the contest ^_^
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well thankyou so much for your in-depth comment. i'm so glad you understand my intentions with this piece. thanks also for the quote. - you're helping me question this world more and more!!
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