Life

If only I had listened. They told me not to sit on the clouds, but...well, it's really hard to resist the temptation. I mean, especially on such a clear day when you can look down and frown or laugh at the people who don't know you exist. I mean, I still get to to see them on all the other days, but indirectly. They show up in a misty, crystal ball which happens to belong to my mother.

It's so fun to be me. But there's too much responsibility to go with it. A good example of that is yesterday. Yesterday when I sat on a cloud. Yesterday when I ended up being seen by an airplane.

I was bored. I had been bored the entire week. My mother told me to play, but I had nothing to play with. I was so bored that for once in my life I wanted to be mortal. Yeah, I know...I was desperate. Just imagine, living forever, nothing to do. So in a huff, I went to sit and think on mars, then on my way back stopped to run around Saturn's rings. And I was going to play ping-pong with Davy, using Pluto, but he had to to leave for some reason or another.

So I went back to my family which watches over Earth. They were sitting, staring intently at the crystal ball. Something was happening. I could tell by the tension that lingered in the air. That's when I decided to go and sit on a cloud.

My first few minutes were uneventful. Well actually, I made friends with a balloon which popped after about two seconds, and later a kite which had lost its tail. I told the kite where the tail was and it thanked me then flew down back to earth. Being omnipotent is wonderful. And that's exactly what I was thinking when nd airplane flew right by me. And they all saw me. Every single human aboard. They knew I existed. For centuries my race had existed in secrecy. We are all-powerful, all-knowing. But we never tampered with their lives too much.

I knew for a fact that a person on a cloud looked very strange to them. Pretty soon all of earth knew about presence.

My mother came up to me. She looked calm at first, but her cheeks began to glow red, "It was you!" She exclaimed.

"What?"

"We knew they would discover us soon! We were going to try to prevent it. How many times have I told you not to sit on a cloud?"

"Two-hundred and fifty-six times."

"Exactly."

So they knew what was going to happen, they just didn't know how. That's why they had been so tense when I came in.

For a while no one spoke to me. Then, this morning my father cleared his throat to tell me the news.

"We have decided that you will be severely punished."

"I thought you had cleared their memories though."

"Most of them. Not all. The point of the matter is that you dared to sit on a cloud."

"I-I'm sorry."

"That's not enough. You will have to live as a human for the rest of your life."

"WHAT?"

"Yes. Today is your last day being...omnipotent. Enjoy it."

So in exactly five hours, my entire existence will change. I will be mortal. I will be prone to death and other horrors. I only hope my family, up in the skies, will protect me.

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  • Lou Berg
    October 2, 2007

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    Concept has great potential

    This was a very good read.

    The concept of the story is novel and has a lot of potential.

    First, the history of this family could be expanded upon to provide a context for the story. Each of its members could be described, personally and their role in the mission of the family.

    Cover the history of the group that leads up to the current story time.

    Describe the history of girl who is in the story now.

    Then follow her, into her new life as a mortal. Have her maintain contact with the members of her family. It opens unlimited possibilities.

    This could be a series of chapters and even books.

    Lots of luck with this idea. I hope you continue to develop it.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.


  • israeligirlstuckinca
    September 2, 2007
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    More, more, MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • EmeraldDreams
    August 31, 2007
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    This would be a great piece to continue. You could have it turn out with a happy ending, or a sad one.
    I thought it was a great story, and I really enjoyed the read. I've not seen this idea before, so it was a fun one to find! I cant help wondering what she looks like though!


  • The Wall
    August 27, 2007
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    That is a very cool concept, and I enjoyed the story tremendously. I really would like to see more of this, and how she turns out on Earth, and If she gets used to it. The punishment seemed a little harsh for the crime, but that's ok. All in all, good job, and good luck in the contest.