Old' Man Rivers, he sailed the seven seas,
a pirate he be, a coughed up little man
with a parrot green, at his shoulder sitting,
he roamed about on a wooden leg
clackt clackt clackt it went,
all over the mast and board
The mightiest men, sank in fear,
as the Old man approched
his eye was patched, under dark cloth
and bones and crosses did he love
he swpet one sword, and it was off with someone's head,
he used to eb the best pirate all around,
but now he's gone, Old' Man Rivers,
he's gone with the passion for the sea!
A contest entry
- Pirates by Drac.
160 points, ended October 11, 2007, 10 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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it has zero link to the idea of "rich kid". sorry but i'll have to remove this
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Very interesting
Fantastic piece, well done and keep writing
Thank you for entering and good luck.beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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this really had nothing to do with my contest...I mean it was cute and all but...
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A nice song... Very funny and thank you for entering. :3
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Fairly new to storywrite I gather?
(From the comments below)
A great poem here! Like it alot =)
Good luck in my contest =)
And welcome =)
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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Lol. Wonderful piece, very funny. Welcome to storywrite!
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Fabulous. Welcome to story write. I hope you have fun with this site.
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Nice piece! Great imagery of the pirate character! Best of luck in the contest with it!
Welcome to Storywrite, keep penning!
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Hahahah was funny. Couple of spelling errors, but a good read through would fix those right up.
Welcome to storywrite. Hope to see you around.
Brooke
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