“It’s fine.” he whispered in my ear. His words were slightly beginning to slur and that upset me. I crinkled my forehead in disapproval and turned my head to look into his face.2
“No it’s not.” I said firmly, staring into his dark unfocussed eyes. I felt horrible, this was all my fault. He hadn’t wanted to go to this stupid party at all, but I, with all my wit and charm, had talked him into coming with me. 3
Dominick has never been the type to go out and party. He doesn’t need parties like this to have a good time. He has his own ways of having fun. He doesn't like having so many people around him like this, being encaged. I’d classify him as a more privet person. Of course, I would be too if I was like him. I consider myself one of the luckiest girls in the world to be one of the few who really know Dominick.4
“What?” he asked. His tan, handsome face looked confused and his mouth was turned down at the corners. Pink lightly colored the top of his perfectly etched nose and his cheeks, making him look as if he were blushing, but Dominick never blushes. I’m the one who does all the blushing.5
"I told you not to drink the punch," I sighed, feeling a pang of guilt. “You’re drunk.” 6
“Am I?” He said in mock surprise. His hand shot up to his jet-black hair as he pushed it out of his eyes. I wasn't sure if he was really surprised, or if he was just messing around with me. I don't think Dominick has ever been drunk before. I don't even know if he's ever been to a party before. Heck, he had never even been away from his home before I had met him a year ago. An innocent smile played on his lips.7
His smile was so completely enchanting I almost forgot about his intoxicated state. When his gorgeous, boyish face twisted up like that I couldn’t help but forget everything but him. Dominick has always been so unnaturally beautiful. His soft facial features are nothing short from being, well, angelic. But his smile is above and beyond anything I’ve ever seen before. Sometimes I feel so unworthy to gaze upon something so breathtaking, words fail to describe it properly. 8
With an amazing amount of effort I managed to tear my eyes away from his dazzling smile. The basement was still over-crowded as ever and the pounding music pulsing from the stereo system was beginning to give me a headache. Even though it was still pretty early, I decided it was time for us to go. I leapt off Dominick’s lap, still grasping his hand, and led him over to the exit. He followed me without any questions up the stairs and out into the back lawn. He was still surprisingly steady on his feet.9
It was so nice to be free of the cramped and crowed house. There wasn’t a single person out here in the pitch black yard. It could barley make out what lay a few inches in front of my feet. The darkness was comforting though, like a security blanket or something. I took a deep breath, inhaling the fresh night air. It had been really hot inside, I realized, and my shirt was clinging to my sticky body. 10
“I’m ready to leave now,” I said looking up at Dominick. My breath caught in my chest as I gazed up at his gentile face being bathed in the silvery moonlight. It was a spectacle more brilliant than the cosmic stars above us. His dark eyes sparkled like diamonds as he looked into my own. 11
“Do you want me to...” he looked at me hopefully and pointed to the heavens. I felt my eyes widen and I looked at him with apprehension.12
“Can you?” I breathed, “I mean, do you think you're really fit for that right now?” He laughed, a sound so beautiful it made me want to cry, and started shrugging off his jacket.13
“What am I going to do? Crash into a plane?” He chuckled some more and I was too mesmerized by the sound to say anything. He handed me his jacket and I slid my arms through it. On me, it was oversized and the sleeves hung way over my hands. It was so warm as I hugged it around my body. I inhaled his sweet smell that lingered on the jacket and smiled. That’s when the sudden fear came to me.14
“You won’t drop me will you?” I bit my lip worriedly.15
The next thing I knew I was pulled up into a loving, firm embrace. My head was pressed down into his shoulder and I felt his breath on my neck.16
“I would never do that. I would never let anything happen to you.” He whispered aggressively into my ear. My heart beat furiously in my chest, and it didn’t have anything to do with fear. I believed him fully and I trusted him completely. Even if he was a bit drunk he’d never – well, I was feeling bad now for even thinking about it. I reached my arms around him, my face still buried in his shoulder, and I felt something jetting out from his back just under his shoulder blades. With a small gasp I let go of him and backed away to get a better look.17
Dominick was standing there. Though his smile was gone, he still looked as gorgeous as he ever had. However, something even more impossibly beautiful than his face was occupying my gaze for the moment. It was his wings.18
Golden honey colored wings protruded from both sides of him, making his body seem somewhat small compared to the long, majestic things. The glossy feathers gleamed in the moon light and I forgot how to breathe. The sight of him just standing there in the semidarkness, his wings spread out to full span, was simply amazing.19
Before I knew what was going on he had scooped me up into his arms and had took a bounding leap up into the air. The sudden rush of cold air on my face made my eyes sting and water. I nestled up closer to Dominick’s warm body and I could feel his powerful wings beating the air up and down beneath them. I loved it when he took me flying with him like this. It’s the most exhilarating, awing, fantastic thing in the whole world. The sensation of soaring through the sky in only another’s arms is indescribable.20
He was an angel, my angel, even if he was a little drunk at the moment. I chuckled at the thought of a drunken angel soaring through the sky a little less gracefully than normal. He had felt my laughter and was looking down at me now with curiosity flaring in his eyes.21
“What?” he asked me over the roar of the wind whipping at our faces. I just smiled and laughed again. It was the most hilarious thought. I took my hand and gently forced his face to look away from me.22
“You just watch out for those planes.” I said, grinning from ear to ear. The corners of his lips twitched up into almost that breathtaking smile and he shifted his gaze forward. I wrapped my arms around his neck and put my head on his shoulder again. I closed my eyes against the wind tearing them up.23
“Your amazing Dominick,” I whispered, but I wasn’t sure if he could even hear me. “I love you.” 24
Then all I could hear was the whistling wind. I decided he hadn’t heard me. I tightened my grip around his neck and kissed his now ice-cold cheek.25
“I love you too.” He said, taking me off guard, and kissing me on the lips. It was simply amazing.
Author notes
lol! i chose the drunken angel option. i don't really know where this came from, i just started writing and that's what came. let me know what you think!
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Comments
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Ohhh that was cool! and funny! I love the drunk angel!
is there going to be some more on this?
It was so sweeet!

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o thank you so much! i'm glad u enjoyed it. thanks for ur comment. and yes, i am writting more of this acually. i hope u read it wen i post it! lol!
peace&love,
greeneyes
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This was such a cute and sweet story! A drunken angel now that's a new one lol. I really enjoyed reading this one. It had action, romance, adventure. All of my favorite things


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Awesome! You have a talent that I only dream of, being able to write short stories. However, you did it beautifully, there were a few errors. Over all though, totally cool. It would be a good base idea or prologue for a full story. ^^

beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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wow! thank you so much for taking the time to read my story! your comment was very flattering and i appreciate it a ton! happy writing to you!
peace&love,
greeneyes
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You skip tenses so that is a little confusing. You've also got some spelling mistakes "haveing" should be "having".
I really like this story. I think you could have expanded it a bit more but for what you have, the description is well done, the dialogue flows well and is believable. You did a good job on this it's just in need of a bit of editing. Keep up the good work.
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Very nicely written. It was nicely opened and closed off neatly. I liked the descriptions and wording of it all. It held my attention and drew me in.
Thanks for entering and goodluck
Emma

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very interesting, a little to melodramatic and over the top but i liked your descriptions, i pretty much fell in love with dominick. you had some spelling mistakes but you can probably fix those by reading over again. this was enchanting. good job and good luck in the contest! (= -
That was a great story, I liked the way that she stepped back to look at his wings as though it was the first she had seen them, but she had actually seen them before, I thought that was just amazing. I really loved reading this, well done and good luck.
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Haha, reminds me of the movie Michael. Have you ever seen it? John Travolta plays the angel.
This was very good- aside from the spelling issues listed below. It was very sweet and picturesque.
Good luck in the PIF contest.
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lol really? no i haven't seen it, i haven't even heard o it before. weird. lol! thanks for the comment.
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First, I'm going to point out the edits as I see them:
haveing-> having
privet-> private
hansom-> handsome
A innocent smile-> An innocent smile
over-crowed-> over-crowded
followed me with out-> followed me without
crowed-> crowded
barley make out what layed-> barely make out what laid
gentile-> this is a real word, but I think you meant gentle here
What am I going to go?-> do
aggresivly-> aggressively
"I felt bad now for even thinking about it" <-this seems like an awkward sentence. You said "felt" (past tense) followed by "now" (present tense). You may want to change "felt" to "feel"
full length-> I think full span would sound prettier than length here
exhilarating-> yay! Someone who knows how to spell this correctly! You have no idea the variations I've seen with this word
souring-> soaring
gracfully-> graceful. "less gracefully than normal" sounds a bit awkward compared to "less graceful than normal"
curiousity-> curiosity
Your amazing-> You're amazing
Onto the personal side:
I thought this was very good, very sweet. I expected more comedy out of a drunken angel though. But still, very nicely written. Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest -
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lol! thanks for that. i knew i had tons of mistakes there, i havn't really had time to really edit it. thanks again fo rthe comment!!!!
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