Stay away from me, you make me scared,
stay away from me, you scarred me twice.
You did too much to me in those two times,
and now you want me-you need me.
I don't care about you and what about all the two times
when you pinned me down and forced your abuse upon me sexually?
How do you think I feel about you and what you did to me?
I could never forgive you for what you've done to me.
So just stay away from me and leave me alone,
you caused enough problems and now,
it's time that it ends and it ends now.
So don't try to tell me that you have changed,
I know that you haven't and it's tearing me apart from the inside.
You're words mean nothing to me like you mean absolutely nothing to me.
A contest entry
- Poems! by Baba Jojo.
115 points, ended August 30, 2007, 16 entries
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Nice writing.
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nice epic piece.....i liked it...some words are better pronounced in some toher lines....good job on this!
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brilliant!
The wording on this is marvelous. Within the world of thought and the world of form that thoughts picture, there appears to be billions of choices we could make, but what we see as choice is an illusion.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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This is sad but I sensed the "breaking free" part of it. Someone violated another (two times, I think it says) then expected the victim to forgive them because they've "changed" and "want or need" that person. It is not exactly rare for this to happen and not exactly common. I felt the frustration, pain and hatred in this. You did a great job of displaying the emotions and actions.
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Thanks for reading. It was kind of based on someone that harmed in a way two times and he wanted me to forgive him. It was all how I felt when I wrote it.
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