Don't You Just Hate It When....

...There’s something nagging at the back of your mind? Something that you just can't shake off no matter what you do? Yes? Well here’s a story about a girl that had just that feeling, the feeling that something important and big was going to happen and she had something to do with it.1

Sighing through class, Tamira gazed at the clock, bored. Something nagged and pulled at her mind but she didn't know what it was. Shaking her head Tamira tried ignoring it. The pull became harder, like her mind was being taken away from her.2

"What!!!" She yelled, leaping from her chair, as the pull became unbearable.3

"Tamira!" Hissed the teacher from across the room,"What do you think your doing? Disrupting my class like that."4

"Sorry..." mumbled Tamira, blushing slightly, sinking into her chair looking miserable. A few of the students snickered behind her.5

After the outburst the nagging suddenly stopped... as if it had heard her anger at it for bothering her. 6

"Briiiiiiiiiing" Sounded the bell as school was out.7

"Finally!" she thought as she slid out of her seat, picked up her bags and jogged out the classroom door.8

Slamming her locker door shut, she went out the front door of the school and went on her daily walk back home. Suddenly the nagging started up again, nearly making her stumble into some of the students standing in front of her. Her eyes wide in surprise, she once again attempted to ignore it. As she passed some of the kids, they started whispering how she was the one that "accidentally" bumped right into the principal without batting an eye. How she was the one that would suddenly jump up in class and shout at nothing there. How she was the one that would all of a sudden gasp at nothing, and run into people with out a second glance. 9

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Ehh... Read it, tell me what i can improve..

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  • karmaxandxcrayons
    August 22, 2007
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    YAY!!!

    Loves it!!! YAYYY!!! Add more!!

    beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 5.

  • Porta
    August 22, 2007
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    Very interesting. Nice teaser. When you said principle, do you mean principal? Good start.