Anniversary

Today would have been our anniversary,
and it brings a lot of memories back to me.
The three years that we spent together,
could in no way have been better.1

So many sweet things that you had done,
and all the times we had together were so much fun.
You were the best and happiest part of my life,
and you would have made the most wonderful wife.2

My love for you was so strong and true,
and I still don't fully know why God took you.
I know however that it was for the best
when he laid your sweet head down to rest.3

One day I will see you in heaven again,
and the full reason God took you will be clear to me then.
Until I see you again up there,
these wonderful memories will be ours to share.4

I love you Britt

Author notes

6. Just so I know you read this, I want you to put a joke in the AN--something that will make me laugh through my tears until I'm crying twice as hard as I was before. Or something corny; I don't really care.

Why did the turtle cross the road?
To get to the Shell Station.

You said corny works.

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  • CinnaAgent11
    November 3

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    So many people have to go through this, it's awful, but yes, God does do things for His reasons, and they are for the best.

  • Heart Breakee silver member
    October 19

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    Nice job!

    This is SUCH a sweet poem. I love the way it ends and it was smooth the entire time. You're a finalist--great job!


  • Seamus gold member
    October 19

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    Touching

    Based on the comments this really touches the people who read it. This is an awesome tribute. Sorry for your loss


  • Glitflyer
    August 25

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    *tsk* *tsk*

    This poem is really really touching!
    Great Job! Its wonderfully written.
    You did really well in the rhyming part.

    Good Luck in the finalist.


  • CallMeWhenUrRich gold member
    August 23

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    Aww, this is soo sad.

    It's always been hard losing the one you love and this pulled at my heartstrings. It reminded me of the movie Up, which to my shame, I cried at.

    Good luck in the contests and congrats on the trophy. It was well deserved!


  • therenaissancegirl gold member
    August 20

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    Make Me Cry (Contest Comment)

    lol yeah I love corny jokes It was a very sad poem, yet it was filled with hope at the same time. You did a good job with the rhyming, too (most people's rhymes end up sounding forced, but yours flowed very well). Thanks for entering, and good luck!

    By the way, was this based on a true experience?

    • ZackTruel
      August 21
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      Thank you for the kind comments. Yes it was a true experience completely. I think I have shared some of it in the below comments.


  • Artificial.Smiles. gold member
    August 19

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    This is a very very beautiful poem. It was very thoughtful and touching. It made me tear up a bit. Its such a shame when God takes a loved one from us. I like to think that they were such fantastic people, he wanted them as angels in heave She's in a better place, and I'm terribly sorry for your loss.

    Good Luck!


  • lavanya
    August 9

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    Beautiful poem dear,
    emotions are dripping from each word and it making it so touchy . i enjoyed it very much. well done .
    good luck dear.

  • leolord5235
    August 9
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    I wanted something happy, I said aw cause it was sad. Not happy


  • Caradoc
    July 18

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    Wow man...I started thinking about my girlfriend while reading this and I started crying. I'm not a tearful person but I couldn't keep them bottled up while reading this. I feel so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine what I would do in the same situation.

    This is one of the most beautiful, heartrending poems I have ever read. This deserves to be in the finals of whatever contest you entered it into.

    • ZackTruel
      July 18
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      Well thank you very much for the kind comments. I really do appreciate them. This happened 4 years ago, but it is still something that brings sadness when I think about it. Time does heal most things, but some things linger on forever, even if it is just a small prick of sadness.

      Thanks for the comments.


  • Lies4Truth
    July 14

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    It is very sweet And i love how you put every emotion into words Its a great poem thank you for entering and good luck in my contest


  • VioletConcept
    June 12

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    Ah, I'm no poet critic. So, sorry if I sound totally stupid when I say anything. The rhyming pattern was simple and sweet, I loved it. "My love for you was so very strong and true," In that line, it would flow easier if you took out the very. But, I'm not a poet.

    Sad and beautiful.

    Good luck,
    Vio

    • ZackTruel
      June 12
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      Thanks a lot for the comment! Very good suggestion. I changed it.


  • LynksTryforceGurl
    June 11
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    sad and sweet. i loved the simple rhyming pattern. good luck in my contest!


  • Midnight-Engaged
    December 21, 2008
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    That's so truly sad. It must have been hard for you to write this.


  • Dawn Bon
    November 9, 2008
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    good luck in my contest! i loved it

  • Rovingone
    September 16, 2008

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    This was a very gentle and deeply moving piece. It must have been most difficult to face this sort of thing. I thought it was a beautiful, touching poem.


  • Taylor Renee
    October 30, 2007

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    *tears*

    Congradulations.
    You're the second entry to my contest to make me cry.
    So many have been very sad, and made me want to cry, but yours is the second to actually get tears out of me.
    This was so...bittersweet, is the only word I can think of. It's so beautful: not bitter, but oh so sad, how she died.

    SO beautiful.
    You did good with the rhyming, but I think the rhyme scheme sould've been a little different to make it read better, but it doesn't matter. The meaning to this was wonderful, and very tragic, yet almost heartwarming how you're not mad or depressed by fate; you remember the good times and such, thinking of when you'll meet again instead.

    Wonderful

    Very nice work

    (I used the word 'you,' assuming this is true. If not, okay, but you know what I mean )

    Thank you so much for entering, and good luck!!

    xoxo
    Tay

    • ZackTruel
      October 31, 2007
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      Aww, I am so glad that you liked it. It made you cry, and that is what you were wanting, so I am glad that I could write it in a fashion that could portray the emotions I had when I wrote it. Getting all of those feelings and emotions on paper is hard sometimes, especially with trying to make it rhyme, but I feel that I got lucky on this one.

      It is a true story that happened to me as well...


  • heartfullofvenom
    October 21, 2007

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    Awe.

    I really enjoyed reading this. It brings out so of the purest love a person can posses. A true love poem. When you said "You were the best and happiest part of my life,and you would have made the most wonderful wife." I was completely struck by it and i don't know why. This poem brought out a lot of emotion, and I am very pleased with it.

    Good Luck!
    ♥

    • ZackTruel
      October 22, 2007
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      Thank you so much for the wonderful compliments. I m very glad that you liked it. I did my best to capture the emotions I felt and put them on paper when I wrote this poem. I feel I was somewhat successful in doing that, and that is why it does contain alot of emotion. Thanks again for the kind complements.


  • darkpaintedreams
    September 29, 2007

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    This was great, its very sad but at the same time sweet. You can feel the love. I also like how the person is looking to the brighter side, that would be hard to do. Is this a true story? If so I'm very sorry for your loss but I'm also glad it seems you have overcome it and you're only looking at how one day you're going to be with her. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.

    • ZackTruel
      September 29, 2007
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      Well thank you very much for your compliments! I am very glad that you liked it. Oh, and yes this poem is a 100% true story about what happened in my life 18 months ago.


  • Ayesha Raees
    September 24, 2007
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    well the poem is good but (dont kill me) as i am judging for a contest... first of all poems were allowed...
    but the poem was related to overcoming an obstacle so i am not going to DQ you and its good too so thats a reason too!
    anyway, i liked the ending, when the person thinks that its not the end and there is more to life and he starts to think positively...

    good work
    and good luck in the contest

    • ZackTruel
      September 24, 2007
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      Oh I am sorry, I did not realize that poems were not allowed when I entered it. It seemed to fit what you were looking for perfectly since it was a great obstacle I had to overcome in my life, and it did not have a sad ending(you had asked for it not to), so I accidentally overlooked the fact that poems were not allowed.

      • Ayesha Raees
        September 24, 2007

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        i am not going to DQ it
        and who knows...
        you might win something...


        did you really faced this obstacle in real life?
        if so, i am very sorry to hear of it.
        i know how its feel to lose a loved one... (my grandma)

        • ZackTruel
          September 24, 2007
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          Ok well thank you, and yes this poem is a 100% true story about what happened in my life 18 months ago.


  • lexiconsthedevil
    September 8, 2007

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    wow this has so much emotion in it andi think i almost cried. good job. anything that almost makes me cry will win somthing

    • ZackTruel
      September 8, 2007
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      Aww, well thank you very much. It is a true story, and I think that helped me to write it in a fashion that captures the reader's emotions. Thanks for the compliment. They keep me writing.


  • MyZeroForever
    August 22, 2007
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    Sad, and touching.
    I loved it.
    Good luck.

    • ZackTruel
      September 3, 2007
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      Thanks for the compliment, and thanks for the win!

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