Falling,
Forgotten by clouds
Abandoned by stars
Listening for the saving call
Jumping,
Pure elation of thoughts
Wondrous feelings of adoration
Waiting placidly for the lover’s embrace
Gazing,
Windows of light upon the prairie
Spectral firing from the weeds
Traveling between realms of candescent glow
Of hills and plains,
And penumbrae in between,
Thou walk across thy life
Remembering only what shouldn’t be forgot
In a list
A contest entry
- Poems! by Baba Jojo.
115 points, ended August 30, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is good. It was really calming to read. Don't really know why, but it was.
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My god Andrew stop it! You're out doing me by a lot and it's putting my work to shame! Hehe well as usual your work is terrific Andrew and as usual I'm very jealous
. Well this was great.
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Lol, thank you.
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Your welcome. Your work is good...too good. Hmmm...are you some ninja writer? I believe ninjas excel in everything so I am under the assumption you are now a ninja writer.
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Well... I'm almost a black belt in taekwondo... but I need a mask to be a ninja... *sigh* I guess I also need a sword...a LONG one... yes... lol
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*buys Andrew mask and sword...a short one, and buys a better mask and a longer sword for herself* Here you go. There your mask and your toothpi...I mean sword.
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very very nice.....i liked it alot. Thnx for this one..
some words sounded choppy, but other then that, good job on this one! -
very very very great! i just loved your words!
just brilliant, i luved it!
peace&love,
greeneyes -
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You're mean, Andrew. Mean, mean, mean.
I come looking for something of yours to read, figuring even the master has something I can critisize or help on to make my self esteem go back up from that blow you gave it.
But of course I was wrong! You have to write so spectacularly that I can't say anything that would make this better.
*mumbles*
Meanie. That is so unfair.
This was a wonderful poem. Brilliant wording. I forgot how great of a poet you are. Now I don't want you reading my poems anymore.
The flow was splendid and imagery great. Nice piece.
(Have you ever noticed how hard it is to hold a grudge when even you have to admit something rocks and you're jealous? Probably not.)
Great work, yet again.
oxox
As if I have to sign.
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YEAH! I've been jealous of Asfand's poet skills, and the feelings you put in your poems.
Thank you for reading, Tay.
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Wow! This is really good. I loved it. Wonderfully done. I mean that. Keep on writing. God Bless!
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WOW....I'm speechless.......VERY GOOD!
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Thanks, Kelly!
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