I try to be so calm inside
For if our souls are really tied
You'll feel this anger start to burn
Like the way my stomach churns
It twists this way and that on it's own
Almost like the time I was all alone.
Mustn't feel so mad at the world
For you and me it has twirled
Perhaps blood was shed
and awful things are said
But flowers will grow in disaster
and beautiful arts can be mastered.
You taught me to see
Look at all that I can be
Even after all this war
It's possible to soar
Just believe in your wings and you will fly
Smile for yourself and don't you cry.
I come to this sunny place
Hoping to see your handsome face
There it is, in that crowd
Your voice so low, not even loud
After all the hurt I had to endure
Please forgive me if I'm not sure.
What we share has this glow
Evidence that it continues to grow
Our lips may have yet to meet
But we'll never accept defeat
Even though they look at us wrong
Our relationship is so very strong.
I love you and you love me
Together we'll forever be.
Author notes
I am often angry at the world and this is a poem I wrote to help myself. It...means a lot to me. What d'ya think? T.Y.F.H.M.T. (little note, sorry)
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nice indeed! a very lovely work full of great potential! Awesome job!
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*thinks*
*done thinking*
AWESOME! I really love this! I feel the same way about the world too (the angry part) hehe... Really liked:
You taught me to see
Look at all that I can be
Even after all this war
It's possible to soar
Just believe in your wings and you will fly
Smile for yourself and don't you cry.
and
I love you and you love me
Together we'll forever be.
Good Job!
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This was really great. The evlove of emotion over the course of the poem was done really well, too. Wonderful job on this.
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this is great steph, and i like how you changed anger to love and hope.
i havent ever seen you mad, though i'm sure i've made you angry...
anyway, i'm glad this poem has helped you, and it is a good idea to change your anger to positive thoughts.
you are a great writer!
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Excellent writing, you have described your feeling very well. Anger? I would say you wrote this poem out of love and compassion. Gives me Hope to keep on going in life. Something magical about your writings, it helped me change myself bit by bit...and made me what i am now. Love your poems!!!. Keep up the good work!!! You will be a great writer someday!!!!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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It was angry hahah hehe nah it was brilly pants and exeelnto in describing ur frustration and anger !!
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