Stand As They Always Should

Through blistering heat and icy cold
Stand the tall beacons of old
They've survived many Springs, many Summers
Many Autumns and many Winters
Their arms have housed many creatures
For their bodies have many features

In the bend along the river bed
They choose to lie their weary head
The river acts as a giant mirror
Where they can admire all their splendor
Sometimes the river sparkles all day
While other times it turns a murky gray

The ground is soft beneath their feet
Where solid ground and river does meet
Their toes reach down far beneath the ground
Where from the river they stealthily steal water without a sound
They've stood by the river side by side
Throughout the centuries their friendship has never died

They were tortured as they watched their friends grow frail
If they could speak they would share their sad, sad tale
When the wind blows they are granted their voice
So as the wind whips them they do rejoice
Throughout the centuries they've seen all
They've even seen their old friends fall

After all they've seen one would think they deserve some peace
But that became impossible when their land went up for lease
And so they've discovered the true meaning of rivalry
As humans brought their greed and machinery
With every year their mass becomes ever smaller
While the remaining survivors grow ever taller

But some humans couldn't bear to see the old friends fall
So they got a petition with the signatures of all
So standing as it always should
Is the ancient, beautiful wood

Author notes

Ok, i guess I am a tree hugger.
"Taylor. You're crazy. Hah. That's what's so fun about you."

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  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    November 18, 2007
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    Thats really great. I liked it and it had a great structure. Good luck in the contest.


  • lovableReese
    November 12, 2007

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    i like it. maybe you should write more poems and enter them because it gets kinda boring reading the same one again and again


  • Surreal Rhapsody
    November 11, 2007

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    Wow, that was amazing! ^.^ I loved the way u rythemed! It was amazing! I can tell you put a lot of thought into it! Awesome poem! Good luck on the contest! It was an honer to have you!


  • Rose B Gray
    November 9, 2007
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    Very beautiful!


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    October 27, 2007

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    Alright, the peom itself isn't bad. It is defenetly a tree hugger peom (hehe, i'm also a tree hugger). The grammer however is how shall i say, medocer. You need to put in commas a periods to creat sentences and a more compleate structure. Also, only the first letter of each sentence needs to be capitalized not the first letter of each line (you need to put in sentence structure before capitalization.)
    For example

    But some humans couldn't bear to see the old friends fall,
    so they got a petition with the signatures of all,
    so standing as it always should
    is the ancient, beautiful wood.

    Now where you place periods and commas and construct sentences is up to you thats just a sugestion.



  • Asfand
    October 11, 2007
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    Good title, very deep and hits home ~


  • Taylor Renee
    October 10, 2007
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    Wow, this was nicely written, and a beautiful concept.
    I guess I'm a bit of a tree hugger, too

    No big deal. Stand loud and proud!

    I love the wonders of this poem. You did a nice job!

    Thanks so much for enterin, and I wish you luck!

    xoxo
    Tay


  • Ayesha Raees
    October 8, 2007
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    wow
    just simply... wow
    i love it!
    i have ever read something like this before, and when i fisihed reading this, i had tears in my eyes and i had a mixture of emotions in my chest... its really good

    a suggestion from me, try distributig your poem into stancas, its better that way... it looks more better and organized!
    good luck in my contest!


  • Midnightmare
    September 5, 2007

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    nice poem... abstract? not too sure. this was interesting and the rhyming and flow wasnt too bad.
    thank you for entering


  • asthray.heart
    September 1, 2007

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    I am not quiet sure what to say on this, when I go to comment mi mind goes blank and I am at a loss for words.
    It was beautiful because of what it was written for, but I don't know.

    Tnks for entering and goodluck.

    ~Lady Madeline.

  • Baba Jojo
    August 30, 2007

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    overall, a nice poem!

    some very long sentences, break them up, let the poem run freely and softly...the tone was hard and firm...let it be smooth...

  • ZackTruel
    August 28, 2007
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    Wow, really great poem! It had amazingly good rhyme, and it was long as well. I am sure you spent a good amount of time writing. I loved how you gave hints all through the poem as to what it was about. Great use of scenery and personification when speaking about trees!


  • MyZeroForever
    August 23, 2007

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    Wow,
    That was awesome.
    I loved the line 'Throughout the centuries their friendship has never died'
    Well, Good luck.


  • k8fairy
    August 19, 2007

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    Wow, I love that poem, I think it tells the story of trees in a beautiful way, I wish more people saw trees this way, then saving forests wouldn't be so hard.


  • HeartSxAnDxStripeS
    August 19, 2007
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    That was a great poem, I loved it. Trees ROCK

    Well done, that was a great poem.


  • Yi Yin
    August 18, 2007

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    Wow! This is good! I like it... All about nature... Really interesting... Realy true about humans... I love that line though hehe..
    Good Job!
    Good Luck in the contest!

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