The Trials of Love

I beseech thee, think of me and no one else for we are too be bound in between the deep shackles of holy matrimony.1

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The pain, the suffering we will recieve, all because of our love for each found to be to inappropriate by others.3

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The deep dark abyss, that is darker than Black itself, waits for betrayers of matrimony, and it's partners.5

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I love thee with all my heart, but does thy heart think the same about me?7

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My cain-coloured hair spreads upon thy chest as we have made love, and shared love to the depths of love in itself.9

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My tawdry-lace lays on the bed table, waiting for me too put it around the flesh of my plump neck, despite it's rust I still use it, but I wish for your fingers to clasp the chain around me, 11

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For if you die before I see you again the last memory of you will be your touch on me.13

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Love in itself binds the love we feel, the passion, the heartaches, the tension, the anger and most of all, the touch of destiny in all of it, is broken,15

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By my knowing that you have a leman, or a mistress, or some other woman out there that you love more than I.17

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Go be with your lover destined if you will, be heart ache has made me recieve enough pain as it is.19

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My silhouette was used triggered your love, and that is what I want you to use to unbind it from me.  21

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Goodbye, fair one, for you have I loved in all eternity we could not break it. 23

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  • plurangel silver member
    August 22, 2007

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    very nice poem. my favorite line here was he pain, the suffering we will recieve, all because of our love for each found to be to inappropriate by others.i love that . goodluck in my contest


  • Frozen Angel
    August 18, 2007
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    I love the vocabulary you used. Awesome! Keep it up.

    *Frozen Angel*


  • ArtificialSweetener
    August 18, 2007
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    I like thy Poem!

    Haha!

    I like the way you used old language in this poem, very good!

    Good Luck!


  • LadyLionnir
    August 16, 2007
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    This was something very...moving. It showed how two mortals fall for each other, fight and then seperate even if they are "destined to be together" It's really important that you pointed this out! Good job, thank you for entering the contest and good luck!!!


  • six of diamonds
    August 16, 2007

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    too be bound--> to
    heart ache--> heartache

    I really liked this poem a lot, it was really different and it has a unique sound, keep writing!! Excellent!

  • one last time...
    August 16, 2007

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    this was different, but not in a bad way. i liked how you typed Black instead of black. i found a mistake..line 11 you say was twice. other then that this was really good...better then any poem i ever wrote...lol gj

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