He sat looking over the smoke filled room trying to find any eyes wandering his way. None yet. Sitting back, he adverted his attention to his surroundings, nothing more than a scum bucket. The walls painted black, just for the effect of having the room darker than it should be, forced the area into being slightly claustrophobic. Every second the walls were closing in on him, but it was okay, because the air was a light gray making the open space seem vast, and never ending. Booths lined the walls, covered in tight crimson leather that adhered to everything it touched in the musky humidity of the room. This gave every girl that wore a skirt a nice, amusing, treat when they stood up.1
This night was for him to partake in the simple act of hunting, the modern version with bodies and heat. He liked the simplicity of it all, the chase and the sweaty conquest. That is why a pair of eyes in the dull gray were the only thing he seemed to care about at that particular moment. He was a man, and the dull ache he now possessed from an all to over active imagination was not helping anything. Finally, his mission was nearly completed by a blond walking towards him. 2
Blue. Fuck me oh my god so blue. He wasn't sure when people were allowed to have such bright yet sexy eyes. She was leaning over the table now, just staring at him, cleavage out in the open welcoming him in. She would be easy no fight, no play, but red against that pale skin seemed so alluring to him at the point. He wasn't about to say no.3
"Emili," she breathed out indicating her name.4
Smirking he said, "Regen."5
"Interesting name," Emili commented absently.6
"I don't think you really care about my name right now," so there was a little game, fun.7
She shook her head no, and stepped away signaling him to come closer. To get up, and show himself because Regen kept his dark eyes silent unlike the blond, Emili. His mouth would not move from its slightly curved configuration. Expression would be his downfall; he needed the nothingness in his eyes, and the Mona Lisa smile to convey mystery and sex, nothing more, nothing less. 8
Naturally, he did as she motioned playing into the game that he was creating. She would think that this game belonged to her, that she made the rules of this night. Until he managed to get her where he wanted her. That was when she got to see just what might become of her in his hands.9
Regen stood, pressing his tall lean body into hers, and leaned to her ear, "My place?"10
When he traced her ear with his tongue all she could do was nod and follow him out, to his rented car.11
The cool night hit him hard, and forced all air out of his body. There was such a difference from the dank club. Inside the air clogged your lungs, and stung your eyes outside it burned the lungs, and breathed into the eyes. It was clear and starry out, when he looked over, Emili was admiring the sky. He widened his grin, and headed to his silver Lexus. 12
They didn't talk on the quick ride. Regen merely focused on driving, and the look on her face when she saw him. Not, himself, but him, Regen's toy, his test dummy. He expected this girl to act as the other one had, she screamed, and was quickly dealt with. Screaming was not an acceptable action at that time. Though burring someone alive seemed to live up to his every expectation. He had only gagged that one, a brunette. Her eyes were so expressive, he wanted to see the look of fear at the understanding of what was happening to her, and was not let down.13
He smiled at the memory as he turned into his driveway, and got out of the car. Emili followed behind him staring at the muscles moving in his back as he walked swinging his arms. She could use the word attractive, but it would have been an understatement. Regen was dark, brooding, and gorgeous. He was one of the people she knew came with the promise of an interesting time.14
Regen didn't say anything as he walked towards his basement. He had to start plotting out his plan for this girl. She was cute, not worth keeping more than the night, but she would be fun to torture. To, cut, and mutilate until he was finally bored with her. Boredom was really his only issue. Once the blood loss or the pain made them pass out all the fun was over.15
Stopping at the door he looked back at Emili who was right behind him. She let out a small smile, and started backing him against it. He let it happen, but only to deepen the shock of what Emili would see when she finally descended the stairs behind the door he was now backed against. She would think some great pleasure awaited her, when in reality his great pleasure was the only thing that laid beyond the door. 16
Their bodies collided, and she leaned in running her tongue over his bottom lip. Regen didn't move, but let her lean in more and begin to kiss him. He opened his mouth letting her tongue in. He gave up all power to her then in that kiss, letting her think she would have the power all night. That would not be the truth, and the only person right now that knew it was Regen, and soon his toy would, then the girl, Emili.17
Turning his head away from her mouth he spoke, "Down here."18
Regen opened the door, and followed her down. Light wasn't an issue because he kept two work lamps on at all times. It was dark enough to hide anything from a potential victims view, but light enough for him to see, and have his fun.19
When she gasped his head shot up. A grin spread across his now lip stick stained mouth. His hand slid over the rough concrete of the wall as he came up behind her, "That's my toy."20
Emili turned around and looked at Regen, "Listen. I don't know what crazy shit you're into, but I'm not."21
She looked at the bottom of the stairs at the naked, blindfolded, body cuffed to the wall. He was clean for once; Regen noted, also looking, all of the many scars that covered his boy were showing. They gleamed lightly in the sweat that had broken out when he heard Regen's voice. There was one exception to the cleanliness of his toy. The boy had a long gash running down the right side of his body from armpit to hip that was given to him before Regen had left. Blood was pooled on the floor and hours later it was still bleeding slightly. The sweat now helping it drip down slowly.22
"He is my test dummy. That is what I was going to do to you, but I think I'd rather hear more screaming from you tonight." Regen answered grabbing her arms, and forcing her down the stairs.23
Picking up some rope that he placed on the end of the railing earlier that night Regen made quick work of tying her hand and legs together. Leaving her to drop on the ground Regen made his way back to his nameless toy. Slowly he caressed the boys face whispering to him.24
"To much this time, too much." 25
Regen began placing small kisses on the boy's face to help comfort him. He was still not sure why comfort was important. The boy was chained to a wall, and tortured daily. It had been almost four months now. Boyfriend had turned into sadistic monster, and the art of sex had become the art of blood letting. It all made Regen happy though, which was the real issue at hand, everything was for his happiness. This included making his boyfriend a test dummy for the unthinkable. Before leaving the body Regen kissed the boy slowly invading, and caressing the dry mouth with his wet tongue.26
"Emili I think I'd rather skin you alive, or take the pretty eyes out of your head." Regen said stepping away from the body, and closer to hers on the ground. 27
She screamed loudly and, he smiled. Regen petted her head as he walked past her to a stonewall on his right that was adorned with many metal, but rusty hooks. The hooks were not bare though, and held many large knives and smaller ones. Regen picked up a smaller knife, and headed back over to Emili.28
"I think I would like to keep those pretty eyes of yours Emili," Regen reached down, and took her head in his hands. She replied with a loud screech. 29
She began trying to bite him. Regen answered her actions with a punch to the head, and a mumbled threat. That punch had brought her to the brink of consciousness, but the pinch of the knife in her eyes socket brought her back, screaming. It came out easily enough with a sound similar to a suction cup coming undone. Her body was now bucking, and he chose to sit on top of her to steady the actions. The second was not so easy to get out between the screaming, and the squirming. Regen ended up scrapping the skin just blow the eye socket to the bone, and cutting a circle around the eye before it came out.30
He knelt picking up the first eye and holding it his hand just looking enjoying the pure shade of deep ocean blue. He could now keep that color for the rest of his life. Regen stood, and looked at the girl writhing in pain on the floor before turning, and dropping the eyes into a jar that already held three other blue pairs.31
"Be quiet," he yelled over her screaming as he placed the knife back on its hook, "it's not doing you any good."32
Regen then walked over to the sink to wash is hands off. Checking his wristwatch he saw that it was only one in the morning. There was time for more. He smiled at Emili who had passed out again, this time from the pain. It wouldn't kill her, but it would be fun for the next victim to see two, his toy then an eyeless girl. While walking past the boy Regen let his hand trail over the other's lower abdomen.33
"Still love there," Regen muttered shutting the door to the cellar.34
Author notes
The title is actually from the movie Donnie Darko. The story on the other hand has nothing to do with it. This was written for one contest that just never got judged and it seems to fit into this new one well enough.
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i loved this story. At first, it sounded like it was going to be about erotica but it wasn't at all. i love how he gauged out her eyes and also how he had a boy toy...love it!!! i never heard of donnie darko and i kinda feel like i'm missing something, but i love this story. good job and good luck!
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Donnie Darko. A true masterpiece that did NOT recieve the attention it deserved. Your story was such an entertaining read. I laughed when your character described those blue eyes. That was just so REAL. Fun fun story here.
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Thanks!!
and power to the donnie darko fans lol
-Amber -
Whoa this was amzing. Nice to see more Donnie Darko fans around this site. I love that movie. Well anyways that was a reaqlly moving write. i loved it.
Dara -
For a story of mine with a cop and some more victims I suggest going and reading the Carnal Beauty series they are all labled on my author page!
-Amber -
I, too, saw the title and was attracted (love that Donnie Darko). This write kept me on the edge of my seat. I was kinda disappointed that it ended where it did (does that make me sound SICK?!?)
If you add a cop and more victims- you have yourself a novel.
Edited on Aug 31, 8:42 p.m. because 'my keyboard is broken and the space bar doesn't work sometimes!'. -
Wonderful, please keep it up.
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Yay! I love Donnie Darko! But anyways, you probably don't care..
So, to the story...
I really liked this one, it's truly amazing. You're obviously a great writer, judging from this story. Your descriptions were great and you are really good at using your words to create imagery. I saw the story in my head as I was reading, and I love that. This story really grabbed my attention, and I was stuck with it the whole time I was reading it, which is very important in a story. You did a really great job. Good luck in the contest! -
Whooo a Donnie Darko fan!! Nothing but the title came from the movie, and I love your motto that was when they were in the movies right. Very nice :0)
-Amber -
really nice I Lyked it it grabed My attention and held on to it till the end very well done hehe I love sadistic shyt its awsome and gets the mind flowing but anyhoo you didi a kick ass job
~Preston~ -
Woohoo! I came to read this because the title instantly made me think of Donnie Darko, and I grinned to see that's what you'd taken it from.
Anyways though, I loved this story a lot. Its graphic descriptions made me literally hold my breath, and I felt like I was watching Regen do all of these things. Actually, I was also reminded of Hannibal Lecter... I guess that makes sense, heh. Anyways, there were a few places there that it looked like you had skipped over a word in your sentence, but that was all. Awesome story here, it's very intriguing because it makes me dread reading more, and yet also want to, as well... to see how the next victim reacts, what he does next, etc. Good luck in the contest.
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Okay, this is the kind of story (although, there have been others in my contest) that I was looking for. I LOVED everything!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The sexy attractions, the sadist veiw-points, the craziness of the guy, the fact that crzy people have fears too, the girls line, "I don't know what crazy shit your into, but I'm not." (it's the kind thing a real person would say and I could actually hear her voice), the title!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (A small note on that, I LOVE THAT MOVIE AND I GOT IT ON D.V.D.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! But, I know the cellar door thing, just, nothing like this ever happened in that movie, so I'm wondering, did that phrase get you to think of this story? I would like to know. Also, if you read my motto, I think you would enjoy it!!!! ;-) !!!! And one more thing, if those of you that have not seen the movie, "Donnie Darko" she is right, you must see it and you will love it. Or you will be confused, one of the two.)
Now, I did see a few small mistakes, but it's okay, it happens all the time. Iloved this story soooooooooooooo much!!!!!!! Jeez, I can't get over it. :-)
Awesome story and thanks for entering!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~F.H.~ -
Sexy sadists are the best kind *laughs* I love how he's described as this debonairly handsom man, but then he has a boy in his basement for 4 monthes and takes the girl's eyes out. The sensory description of the bar was great, too. Nice giving him that little claustrophobic quirk ... gives us a little view into his psycho mind. Awesome, awesome story.
~Laura -
gory. kinda sick but interesting as well.
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Thank you lol I really needed that nice comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
-Amber -
wow i loved this story. the guy was so sadistic and it was just so damn cool. i loved it. i loved the detail and everything. great job and good luck!
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Forget all the negative criticism you've gotten, THIS STORY RULED. Sometimes a person doesn't need a reason to be so sadistic; they just are because they choose to be. The descriptions and things that were happening were incredibly well-done, and all I can do is say, "Damn." Great job, and good luck.
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I thought this story was fairly well-written. And it did horrify me, so good job there! Yes, it could use a little revision, but overall I think you did a very good job at describing the events. I liked the story.
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...interesting...but not really as good as some of your other stories. Although, I really did like when he took out her eyes, very nice. Good story!
~Katie~ -
Fairly interesting, but a little sloppy. When you write "to much this time, too much", it makes the mistake of using "to" instead of "too" all the more obvious. I very much like the concept behind this story, and the way you have the events plotted out, but this feels like a draft to me. I'd love to read this story if it was revised or even re-written, with more heat to the build up and more attention to detail.
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at one point, boy should be body. there are some other small errors, mostly commas and stuff. to should be too, in the line about too much. the end was sort of weird, it didn't make much sense to me. the story doesn't have enough insight into the main character, we don't get to know why he's so sadistic. i liked the line "outside it burned the lungs, and breathed into the eyes". the description leading up to the events, the seduction, was nicely done. overall though, i'd say stick to your day job.
Edited on Aug 12, 3:17 because 'spelling'.
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