the sun crept behind the clouds
allowing the moon to outshine
unhanding dusk will allow the shrouds
of hating demons to dance through vine
drinking the wine of the dead
leting their hatred be fed
to the wolves of the summer gone
and the winter night under scorn
flames danced into the winter night cold
beyond the sight of my eye
frost hit the grass of the forest untold
for i was hers to spy
beneath the scarlet moon
came the beauty created to consume
with eyes dark as wine
and skin soft as snow
her scent a love filled fume
dancing desires i had kept
from everyone she knew the concept
of love and darkened ways of those wept
where the lost and reviled had stepped
all desire took me to her flesh
temptation of lust had taken my mind
still i had not moved towards her angel woven mesh
in the night she was mine to find
i saw the flames in her eyes reflect upon
the terrors i had tried to forget
but through her stare
i didn't care
and i allowed my soul to be unkept
taken with her eyes
i felt my soul fly
though the pain within my heart seems to die
i gave myself into the undying lust for her
and allowed my heart to thaw
but only then could i see
that she had taken me forever more
the stars shined upon the ground
and asphodel grew from the sound
of chanting words she spoke to me
that allowed my heart to see
the breaking of her soul before
that took her away forever more
into the darkness no more in the light
and only herself does she have to spite
jaded in the eyes of herself
i fell in love with her beauty
her curse becoming mine as well
still in the end her love is cruelty
the dancing demons fall away
into the forest they go to stay
for the ritual has only just begun
she shone upon the ground in watercolours bringing life
to the world so dark and cruel to me
and she stole away my strife
till she danced upon my silent grave
after her knife entered my heart
now eternally i live in bliss
for i died within from the start
fly away my soul won't pray
for she took it all away
my body now gone and my flesh torn
from where my heart was meant to stay
she still dances alone in the forest
her fate has sealed itself
to the land upon where no one sees
her beauty seared to filth
dance into the lonely days
where no one for your soul will pray
for you took their lives and now they live
in the hell you created just for play
night for you will never die
for all heaven torn apart
and the darkness from your has leaked
into the blackened sky to start
you torture after what you did
to me and all the rest
we laugh at you in eternal bliss
for your sould had never wept
over the ones you loved
and killed for pleasure
beyond the grave our souls will stay
free like a white dove
now as you dance alone
you body rots and soul turns to stone
carrion for you cruel device
and allowed virtue to turn to vice
Author notes
Just something I wrote recently. Can't remeber how I felt at the time. I think I was feeling alone at th etime.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A great story of love and lust, with powerful imagery and wonderfully dark. Excellent wording and very well woven. Perfect. Great job
What’s with the title though? Surly you can think of something a little more inventive and drawing. (Sorry I can't really talk, I have had my fair share of bad titles. but never the less I think they are important)
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thanks, the title is called unknown because we dont know who 'she' is, it is the idea of falling in love with someone and having lust for them when you don't know who they are. it is her basically being unknown to the person who tells the story, and unknown to everything else
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i can sense the aloneness lol - it was morbidly beautifull


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oh its so good!! my favourite stanza was:
jaded in the eyes of herself
i fell in love with her beauty
her curse becoming mine as well
still in the end her love is cruelty
it flowed really well and the imagery and stuff was good cause i was kinda imagining the storyline in a way.
great write <3




