Ally drummed her fingers on the side of the ticket booth as she waited for the old lady that smelled of bubble gum to give her the 30 tickets Ally payed for.
She glanced around looking for Troy who had slipped off to buy a corn dog. Her gaze was met by a kid around the age of 11 looking rather impatient about waiting in line. The boy glared at her behind thick glasses.
Ally just sarcastically grinned at the kid and turned back to the gray haired lady who was still handling her money with shaky whithered fingers. It most likely did not help that they lady's fingers were ladened with over sized rings that were bumping into everything.
“Hey you go the tickets yet?” Troy asked from behind Ally. She turned around and mouthed 'no'. She was getting more and more frustrated by the minute. Finally the old woman handed her the tickets and they were able to proceed to the wonder carnival. 'Whoopee!' Ally thought to her self sarcastically.
“Ok lets go.” She said turning around to Troy who was stuffing a greasy corn dog into his mouth. “Where do we want to go first?” Ally asked trying to have fun and lighten her mood.
“Um...” Troy replied with a mouth full of food. “'At 'ay” He said pointing in the direction of the gravatron and fairest wheel. They walked over to the ride area of the carnival and rode the gravatron, fairest wheel, and inverter. After each ride Ally felt sick to her stomach and Troy just kept wanting more.
“So how has your day been?” Troy asked Ally as they walked back to the food area to grab some dinner.
“Well it was pretty boring until you called.” She responded thinking about sitting on the computer all morning and afternoon. “I mean I was still in sweats when you called. So I had to shower and get ready in like 20 minutes, which is no walk in the park with this amount of hair.” She said motioning to her long dirty blond hair that reached the small of her back. “How about you?”
“Well I worked out this morning and then went to work until three when I called you.” He said as they walked up to a food stand that smelled like grease. “So yea pretty boring myself. And I have nothing to do the rest of the evening, so you want to come over and we can watch that new movie I was telling you about?” He asked comfortability.
“Sure-One turkey sandwich please.” Ally said to the cook/waiter and continued to talk to Troy. “You mean that movie about the spy that goes to Brazil?” She and Troy had seen the previews together and had talked about going to see it.
“Yea-I will have a chili dog. I rented last night and I have not watched it yet.” He seemed very happy that he had something to do for the rest of the evening. Ally laughed at his enthusiasm and glanced over her shoulder. There was that kid again staring at her like she was a plague. “So since we are all out of tickets, we can leave as soon as we are done eating.” Troy continued.
“Yea sure.” Ally replied, still a little unnerved by the angry kid. She looked at the sky and saw dark rain clouds moving in from the west and looked back at Troy. “Plus it looks like it is about to rain.” Their order was done and they went to find a picnic area to eat. Like always Ally managed to get food on herself even though Troy had the messy dinner she was the one with mayo all over her lap.
By the time they were both finished it had started to rain lightly and the fair was still as full as when they arrived. Once they had made it to the area where Troy was parked the rain had unleashed its full furry. They had to dash to his small high mileage car. When they arrived at Troy's house all the lights were out but one and his car was the only one there.
“Where is everyone?”Ally asked Troy in a hushed voice as they got out of the car. His house was usually a bustle of activity because there were three teenagers in the house.
“Well Mom and Dad took Jake and Rob out to dinner for their birthday since, you know parents can't be seen at the Weston Twin's birthday party. And then Callie is up in her room.” He said pointing at the upstairs window with a light illuminating it. “So are we going to go in?” He asked as Ally stared at the window.
She glanced around looking for Troy who had slipped off to buy a corn dog. Her gaze was met by a kid around the age of 11 looking rather impatient about waiting in line. The boy glared at her behind thick glasses.
Ally just sarcastically grinned at the kid and turned back to the gray haired lady who was still handling her money with shaky whithered fingers. It most likely did not help that they lady's fingers were ladened with over sized rings that were bumping into everything.
“Hey you go the tickets yet?” Troy asked from behind Ally. She turned around and mouthed 'no'. She was getting more and more frustrated by the minute. Finally the old woman handed her the tickets and they were able to proceed to the wonder carnival. 'Whoopee!' Ally thought to her self sarcastically.
“Ok lets go.” She said turning around to Troy who was stuffing a greasy corn dog into his mouth. “Where do we want to go first?” Ally asked trying to have fun and lighten her mood.
“Um...” Troy replied with a mouth full of food. “'At 'ay” He said pointing in the direction of the gravatron and fairest wheel. They walked over to the ride area of the carnival and rode the gravatron, fairest wheel, and inverter. After each ride Ally felt sick to her stomach and Troy just kept wanting more.
“So how has your day been?” Troy asked Ally as they walked back to the food area to grab some dinner.
“Well it was pretty boring until you called.” She responded thinking about sitting on the computer all morning and afternoon. “I mean I was still in sweats when you called. So I had to shower and get ready in like 20 minutes, which is no walk in the park with this amount of hair.” She said motioning to her long dirty blond hair that reached the small of her back. “How about you?”
“Well I worked out this morning and then went to work until three when I called you.” He said as they walked up to a food stand that smelled like grease. “So yea pretty boring myself. And I have nothing to do the rest of the evening, so you want to come over and we can watch that new movie I was telling you about?” He asked comfortability.
“Sure-One turkey sandwich please.” Ally said to the cook/waiter and continued to talk to Troy. “You mean that movie about the spy that goes to Brazil?” She and Troy had seen the previews together and had talked about going to see it.
“Yea-I will have a chili dog. I rented last night and I have not watched it yet.” He seemed very happy that he had something to do for the rest of the evening. Ally laughed at his enthusiasm and glanced over her shoulder. There was that kid again staring at her like she was a plague. “So since we are all out of tickets, we can leave as soon as we are done eating.” Troy continued.
“Yea sure.” Ally replied, still a little unnerved by the angry kid. She looked at the sky and saw dark rain clouds moving in from the west and looked back at Troy. “Plus it looks like it is about to rain.” Their order was done and they went to find a picnic area to eat. Like always Ally managed to get food on herself even though Troy had the messy dinner she was the one with mayo all over her lap.
By the time they were both finished it had started to rain lightly and the fair was still as full as when they arrived. Once they had made it to the area where Troy was parked the rain had unleashed its full furry. They had to dash to his small high mileage car. When they arrived at Troy's house all the lights were out but one and his car was the only one there.
“Where is everyone?”Ally asked Troy in a hushed voice as they got out of the car. His house was usually a bustle of activity because there were three teenagers in the house.
“Well Mom and Dad took Jake and Rob out to dinner for their birthday since, you know parents can't be seen at the Weston Twin's birthday party. And then Callie is up in her room.” He said pointing at the upstairs window with a light illuminating it. “So are we going to go in?” He asked as Ally stared at the window.
Author notes
I am so sorry I went over the limit of 200 words but I could not fit going to the fair, and going to a friends house into 200 words if I wanted it to be a fair introduction of characters and had detail.
FYI: so you don't have to count it is 797 words.
If you have any suggestions on what the name should be I am all ears.
A contest entry
- New contesty idea thing! FUNNESS! by Taylor Renee.
175 points, ended September 30, 2007, 11 entries
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Another comment from dear me!
Might as well figure out who you all are and just message you
The way this is gonna work is this:
From now on you can write only as much as you want. Everyone has to do this next part, that I already have going, but after that you may end your story anywhere.
You can stop it at any place, and I'll keep giving new ideas until everyone finishes!
The longer your story ends up, the better chance at winning. But that doesn't mean someone who stops can't win!
So, get it?
If not, message me and I'll explain more
I'm so weird.
I love how everything's working out! Keep it up and get writing!
xoxo
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Tay -
Okay guys!
I'm ending it with just these 12 entries, because I haven't gotten enough entries *mumbles*
NOW!
Next in your story you will write about one of the following (or more than one):
You're friends getting into a fight.
They watch movies.
(Phantom of the Opera, Any Disney movies, and a bunch of other bonus. But any movie is fine
Also, bonus if they have fun with their food! Hah.)
One of the friends starts going out with someone and the other friend really doesn't approve, but their advice is basically being ignored until something happens that the other friend is in trouble, but it's too late because the other friends left.
They just talk some while hanging out.
TRUTH OR DARE! Hah. Best game ever. Let em play!
Or make up something. Hah, that was pointless. But I'd love it if the majority was bent on these!
xoxo
Love,
Tay
PS: Message me when you update! No word limit or anything! -
lol!
You do not have to be sorry!

I don't know who's this is, but it's no problem! As long as you want your story to be a longer one, I'm all for reading it!
Great job on this!
I really love the kid, the twist. At the fair I mean.
You wrote this really well, and I know this is gonna be a great story!
Now.
I don't know if you know me.
But I have a very unheathy obsession with twins.
You mentioned twins brothers.
And one favorite names in the world is Callie, the sister.
My beloved cat's name is Callie, and I named the main character of my first book after her.
So you either know me really well to get me to love this in small ways or it's a big coincidence
Great job!
Can't wait to get enough people for the next round!
xoxo
Taylor

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wow that is a huge coincidence! I have never met you before in my life. Hey do you want me to put my user name in my author's notes?
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How about calling it "The Date"
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