"It looks just like the picture," Garrett cooes. I'm back where I grew up, at our old Moreland barn. He pats a spot beside him. I used to sit here, close enough to hear Mr. Carver on his guitar. He only knew "Nowhere Man", but he'd play it until the fireflies came. He's gone today.
"Do you miss being young?" my husband asks. I close my eyes, place myself back in time. We're running through cornstalks, birds chasing a yellow sky. I can hear the guitar.
"Nowhere man, don't worry. Take your time, don't hurry. The world's at you command ... "
Author notes
I counted and re-counted. This is a story deliberately written in 100 words. It's about a girl and her husband, who go to visit her old barn. Thank you for reading.
A contest entry
- A Short Tale by Mort.
100 points, ended August 17, 2007, 8 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Well even if the contest is over.. I thought the story was very interesting. It was definitely worth reading, great job!
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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It's so touching and inspiring. I love it.
Perhaps you should write more?
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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Aww, thanks. But it was just for a 100-word contest, and I didn't place.
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hmm... very interesting indeed. A very deep plot which is what i am looking for. Good Job and thank you for re-entering. Good Luck!!
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sw counter is way off as always. The only line that confused me was the last line in the first paragraph. Otherwise it was good and flowed well. Good luck in the contest.
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hya, sorry but your story is 105 words long and will not be counted in the contest. Please edit if you want and re-enter.
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WoW! Seriously, great spin. So descriptive and worthwhile. You said so much in 100 words!
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Oh!
I like it! I like it a lot!
It was so sweet, and very well written. I would stink at writing something for that contest
Amanzing job in the few words!
Good work and good luck in the contest!
xoxo
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Aha
Very well spoken! This is a great 100 word story.
You do know it's only 92 words though right? lol.
I did that. I was like OH YEAH 100 words! And then somebody was like, "It's only 93" and I was, "Oh "
lol.
Great Job!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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No, it's 100. If you notice, with all of the entries of the contest, the word count on each them is off. If you count it, it's perfect.
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