"Mommy!" Orion yelled, "I can only find one sock! Help!"
Mommy came down the stairs balancing toast with jam and Orion's Spidey lunchbox with the car keys dangling off her pinky finger.
"Socks?" she asked.
"Mommy, there's only one!" Orion whined miserably, holding up a blue and white sock. "We're going to be late again!" he cried.
"No worries," mommy said. The mischievous twinkle was back in her eye as she rubbed the magic key ring, "we'll just have to go and visit the argyles and tell them your socks need to come home!"
"Ar-gyles, come home?" Orion thought as he wondered who they might be and why they had his missing sock.
Orion didn't have to wait long as the basement room shimmered out of focus and a new room with a shiny dance floor appeared. Hanging from the ceilings were a hundred black records with blue and pink and yellow labels. Out on the dance floor Orion saw a pair of giant socks, one with diamonds like checks turned on their side and one with purple and yellow polka dots! A stripy sock sang into a microphone on the stage, "...rock around the clock tonight..."
Out of the corner of his eye, Orion saw mommy sidle up to a group of cute pink socks while she pointed and gestured at him, but their little cheeks only grew more rosy, they giggled and shook their heads, "No".
She started off toward a group of holey, dirty-looking socks skulking off in the corner, but then she spotted him.
He was a little white sock with a blue band, just like Orion's socks back home. Mommy grabbed him up by the cuff, Orion caught the end of the lecture "...the lot of you were supposed to be back last week!" and "you tell your friends there will be no more slipping out by way of the dryer..."
The sock boy hung limp and contrite, "Yes, ma'am," he said, falling neatly into Mommy's hand, a regular sock ready to go to school for the day.
Author notes
Prompt: where socks go when they get lost in the dryer
Answer: "to the sock hop, of course!"
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A contest entry
- Check yourself here. by Token Massacre.
350 points, ended August 9, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
300 word contest
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That was realy cute and well writen. I love reading kid stories that are more interesting then sam i am and green eggs and ham, (i worked in an elementry school for a while, i hate those stories )
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lol
This was funny and cute. It was actually written well, balance of dialouge, details and other important parts of a story to keep flow and make it move. I'm not really a child, but I have to say its kinda cute. Cute little orion won my heart over
The only other thing is like the others said the commas. But the story was cute again
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Not a huge fan of kiddie stories...but as argile sock sagas go this is...I mean I wouldn't put it on par with Thomas Wolfe...but it's...I mean it may not exactly be Lawrence Durrell...but it's, well...it's not really The Idiot or Brothers K, The Possessed or The Magic Mountain, but...well...not that it approaches Being and Nothingness, or La Nausea, or Justine, or Montolive or Balthazaar or Clea...but darn...
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There's a few punctuation mistakes (mostly missing commas)
hahaha the socks got owned! that's awesome! Good story and I'm glad that you were able to edit without taking away from the overall story.
thanks for entering this and good luck!
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Hopefully caught and fixed those commas up!
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you need to shorten this to 300 if you want to have a chance of winning. (sorry but those are the rules. if you edit let me know and I'll read it. if not then i'll have no choice but to DQ you.)
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