Darts- Full moon stalker ( part 8 )

Darts- Full moon stalker

( Part 8)

The bar lights shone in her eyes. Waking her up. She opened her eyes, lifting her her head of the counter. "You nodded of their man, your a deep sleeper, I tried to wake you up but you were dead to the world". Marishka rubbed her eyes looking around the room. A group of men stood around a pool table, egging each other on to skull their drinks. The old man in the corner, by the door was nodding of to sleep, drunkily.

Everything was exactly the same as before. She looked up at the clock, just going on midnight. "Oh my god, it was just a dream" Marishka said, taking a sip from her glass. "What was just a dream mam" the bar man asked handing her another round.

"Nothing she laughed " Just me falling asleep drunkily again". "Can't sat I've experianced that before" a voice said behing her. Marishka turned around. A women stood behind her smiling, holding a dart in her hand.

"Trust me you don't want to" Marishka said, swinging her body around, almost falling of the chair. "Whoa, take it easy their stranger, you don't want a concusion do you". Marishka shook her head. "Can I tempt you in a game of darts" the women asked moving the dart between her fingers. Marishka laughed, rubbing her eyes again, feeling slightly sick.

"Have you seen the state I am in, I can't even play darts when I am sober, so I don't think I would be able to play when I am drunk, unless of course that is your intention is to watch me loose sadley so you can claim the glory of the winner".

The women smiled " Yes that truley is my intention, hint the sarcasim in my voice, how many drinks have you actually had". Marishka's ears began to ring as she took another sip. " Probably four or five, I can't remember, I fell asleep". She leaned forward slopping her drink all over the women. "OH my god, I am so sorry" Marishka slurred trying to stand up. The women didn't look upset, but rather confused. "Do you have a wallet or an Id" she asked holding Marishka up by the waist. "YES, why" Marishka yelled. The women lifted her up of her seat. " Beacause I am taking you home".

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oh who is this women....

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  • Violet Hawthorne
    August 8, 2007
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    WHO IS SHE?!?


  • k8fairy
    August 6, 2007
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    Exactly the question I wanted to ask, so lost must find out more.

  • erectmeonit
    August 6, 2007
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    WOW!


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    August 6, 2007

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    I like it!

    You do need to work on your spelling, but your form is pretty good. Spelling in Paragraph 1: off not of, there not their, you're not your, drunk not drunkily. Paragraph 3: drunk not drunkily, say not sat, experienced not experianced, woman not women. Paragraph 4: off not of, concussion not concusion, woman not women. Paragraph 5: sadly not sadley. Paragraph 6: woman not women, sarcasm not sarcasim. I think you may have a good story going here. I will read the rest of it.

    Andy

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