A page on my desk
A pen in my hand
Inspiration in my head
Words form at my command
Words from my heart
Flow on the letter of love
When all is done
Brings it to you a dove1
Author notes
Really got no comments on this one...
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A contest entry
- Sugary Sappy Lovey Dovey Affection by plurangel.
200 points, ended August 22, 2007, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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short and sweet. i liked how you fixated writing to your lover instead of telling him/her how you feel. and nice touch on placing a dove in your work.
i agree with another comment on here, your poem doesn't read easily. and as much as i dislike to say this, your poem didn't make me go aww, i'm sorry.
goodluck in my contest. -
Pretty Good
I really liked it, but the last line needs to be changed around some how. It does not read easily, and is not very clear. Besides that though, keep up the great writing!
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 1, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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excellent passionate
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I think that if this poem was longer it would ruin the effect. It flows perfectly.
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I was also thinking the same thing... thanks for reading it!
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I wish it was longer, too, but maybe it's just short and sweet
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i wish it was longer!! cuz its so sweet!! and so nice!!!
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i wish i had more words so i could write more on it... i might come back and write more on it... let's see the views of people first... Thanks!
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