Three centuries ago, in France[1],
Your palace white and opulent
Your soul was loving, quite entranced,
But to Robespierre[2] exuberant
I deemed myself a libertine,
And sent you to the guillotine,
And I was free to go.
In Edinburgh, nineteen-oh-nine,
My lonely love across the sea
An expatriate, a courtesan
To the Coburg-Gotha[3] dynasty
You took my heart so tragically
Bereft of fonder memories
And left me husked and dry
As a planter in the lowly South,
I knew a girl from county court
No gentleman of wealth myself
We had no hours to cavort
You swept my love irreverently,
And left me for nobility
A poor and grimy soul
In Verona’s young millennium
Our families’ war, so trivial,
Barred our romance and escapades,
‘Til blood became convivial,
One weighty, failed errand boy
Your face no longer sweet and coy,
But cold and gray and dead
In present-day America
Our stories weaved, our contours merged
I paid for food, drink, room and board
Naïve and nubile hearts converged
I breakfasted, now taciturn
And willed your youthful heart not yearn
And left you lying there
And now the tales coalesce,
To a fresh but wizened solitude,
A woeful hymn, a happy tune
To notes with many years imbued
The lovers tried,
The capers true,
And timeless in their own.
Author notes
I'm not sure about some of the synonyms I used, but I think it's got good meter, if a little more regular than most modern poetry.
A contest entry
- Sugary Sappy Lovey Dovey Affection by plurangel.
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Comments
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wow completely wow! your poem reminded me of when I read romeo and Juilet. You definitely had a unique style going on with this poem and I admire you for it. The style you chose (as well as the century you provided) definitely set yours apart from the other entries i've receieved. the ending was good but when I re-read the poem i think i was confused on the wording you used for when the lovers went there own way. other than that good job. and goodluck in my contest.
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Hi, someone told me to check out your page in a comment on one of my stories--it's called "the genius mentality" so I'd say that was a high compliment to you--we were talking about having excellent vocabulary at the time!
This poem is wonderful, I chose this one because I have a poem about reincarnation and past lives as well. I would never have thought to string all the lives together that way~
Well, I will come back and visit when it isn't so late and read more...we're right on as far as reading tastes (according to your page)
You may like my story Gateways Through the Penumbra--just wade through the awful chapter one if you read as it needs major revising, but I promise it gets better and I have three more chapters to type up on it this week!
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