This place is so awful
Burning flames ever so warm
But even here, eventually,
A rainbow comes after the storm
Author notes
Okay, at the end of this, picture a rainbow on fire ^^
This was an amazing cntest but it was soooooo hard to do! I hope mine was okay, it's exactly 20 words. I think when the contest is done I'm gonna make it longer and better
Awesome contest Asfand!
A contest entry
- 20 Crafted Beauties by Asfand.
200 points, ended August 3, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! Great done with only 20 words!
Very, very well written, with great imagery =)
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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sensitive write...very nciely penned, the last line was my fav!!
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Whoa! Lovely way of describing burning rainbows
Awesome job and good luck!
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This was really good, but kinda made me think of I don't know... some tragedy that turned out to be a good thing in the end. It was really good though, with sensational imagery. I LOVE IT!!!
beginning: 5, language: 5, ending: 5.
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Okay... this was kinda scary...
I'm wondering what you were picturing here, if it's a picture of Hell, or some sort of clamatic event...
It was really good! Got me thinking there, lol. Good luck in the contest!
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