Elegance

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The rain had stopped.  For that she was thankful. Leaving her car in the parking garage, she raced toward the hotel on foot. She was wearing a newly purchased white satin evening dress. Being the guest of honor, she didn't want to be late. She was just on time. Waiting at the corner for the light to change, a car rushed by, hitting a puddle of water, splashing all over her dress. 2

For a moment she stood in shock. Then holding her head high, she walked proudly to the charity benefit, and took her seat.3

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  • Len Shadow
    August 2
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    Wow Andy, a different background than the norm. I liked the description in this. Good luck!


    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      August 2
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      Hi!

      Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I hope you like this story.

      Yep, I'm playing around more with backgrounds and gold features. It don't improve me writing, but it is fun.

      Andy


  • Dual.Of.Fireflies
    July 1

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    NICE!

    Really good, Andy!!! I really enjoyed this! Hope it NEVER happens to me!!!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      July 1
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      Hi MSM!

      Do you often wear evening dresses?

      The chances are good that it won't happen to you even if you do wear them. If it did, what would you do?

      Andy


  • Crys Moro
    June 24

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    Good one!!

    Really short, and really embarrassing!! Imagine that, Oh I would never go in....not in an all splashed White sattin dress... good luck in the contest!


    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      June 24
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      Hi C.S.!

      I added an image, changed the background and font, and made it two paragraphs to read better.

      Andy

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      June 24

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      Hi C.S.!

      I'm really glad that you like this story. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. Thanks also for the friend invitation. I'll confirm it shortly.

      May you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • whenever love dawns
    October 29, 2008

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    hmmm.. has lots of potential. i could definetly see this going somewhere.. thanks for entering

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      October 30, 2008
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      Hi

      This was just something to give you a little inspiration, if you like. I don't mind if you use it. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting.

      I hope you have many good entries and much fun.

      Andy


  • Elvenfairy
    May 28, 2008
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    this was very interesting. Thanks for entering this into my contest

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      May 28, 2008
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      Thanks

      I checked this one and didn't see a comment from you, so I felt pretty certain you hadn't read it before. I hope you like it. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting.

      Andy


  • HeatherRoseBrown
    February 10, 2008

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    This is a great story! I like how you showed elegance being something more than what you wear. There was one little typo. At least, I think there was.

    In the fifth sentence, it says, "guess of honor". Had you meant to put, "guest of honor"? Besides that one little bit, everything else was great!

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      February 10, 2008
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      Hi Heather

      I've been procrastinating. I've been a bit depressed, but I will get the song done soon.

      Thanks for reading, commenting, and finding my mistake. I've read through it half a dozen times and others had read through as well, but you are the first one to notice that mistake.

      Andy


  • EmeraldDreams
    August 2, 2007
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    This was cool! Stuff like that happens to me all the time, so Im glad she held her head high and got on with it!

  • peripheral visionary
    August 1, 2007

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    that was really good. My only suggestion would be you shouldn't start three sentences in a row with "She". trying mixing it up a little. Other than that, it was really good

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      August 1, 2007
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      Thanks

      There were actually four sentences in a row starting with she. Thanks for mentioning it. I hadn't noticed. Thanks also for reading, commenting, and applauding.

      Andy


  • Siby Anan
    August 1, 2007

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    That's really sweet! I'm glad she didn't feel discouraged when the water splashed in her dress. True elegance lies within

    Great job! You really described the prompt well ^_^

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      August 1, 2007
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      Thanks

      I'm very pleased that you like this shorty. I hope the host does as well. It is pretty good for such a short story, I feel. Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause.

      Andy


  • Taylor Renee
    August 1, 2007

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    Wow.
    I liked this.
    It was really wonderful. Perfect definatition of elegance
    This was a great story, I wish you the best of luck in the contest! Great job!xoxo
    Tay

    • Andy Stephenson gold member
      August 1, 2007
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      Thanks Tay

      I am very pleased that you like this really short, short story. I felt like it was a good story describing elegance. Hopefully Becca will think so as well. Thanks very much for reading, commenting, and all the applause. It is greatly appreciated.

      Andy

  • EmeraldDreams
    July 31, 2007

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    Well hello, brave and fearless writers!

    Ok, you can write either poetry or in story form. Both will have an equal chance of winning. You have 100 words and 24 hours to create your masterpieces on the prompt of:

    “SHOTGUN ROMANCE”

    Or

    “ELEGANCE”

    Please title your piece according to which option you picked, or else write it in your authors notes. Thank you!

    See you all at 4:20 pm GMT tomorrow for judging!


  • EmeraldDreams
    July 31, 2007
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    It's gonna be what seems to be the standard, 100 words


    • Veritaserum
      July 31, 2007
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      you should list this in the rules so everyone knows before they start to write.

      It does seem to be standard for these kinds of contests...but I wonder why so many people complained when "I" did it?? That kinda confused me a bit. Heh.

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