There's Been a Murder!

I'm writing a murder story, but I'm having troubles. I am never good at starting a story.

It's in the crime/thriller genre and I want an opening, to a maximum of five paragraphs, opening a murder story.



Bonus Points - It uses one of the following plots:

- During a high-speed police chase in the suburbs, a child is hit and sent to hospital and passes away afterwards.

- SWAT raids a small home, believed to be a drug lab or some criminal gang hangout, which is wired to explode.

- A man is found dead after a drug deal gone wrong.

- A busy disco in a nightclub ends in disaster as the roof collapses, but foul play is suspected.



It mustn't be longer than 1000 words, but I won't be mean if it's 1012 words, for example.

Contest is Over

  • Contest was judged on November 11
  • Rewards: Gold: 100, Silver: 10, Bronze: 1
  • Final notes:
    Thanks all for entering and for the help. If you don't want your starter used, send me a message and that applies to ALL entries.

    Thanks!

    ~C.

Contest Winners

  1. A beginning for contest.
    Seth stood back and watched. He couldn't have imagined it would have gone better, but this was absoulutely perfect. 1
    by Reaver 100 words, 7 comments, on Oct 24 2:50 PM
    Gold trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  2. Opening for contest- the drug deal
    Jamie Holden was in his office at work, chewing on his pencil. How he craved the taste of cannabis. He had arranged to meet up with his main dealer after work in the carpark. 1
    by Loopy Lou 1998 200 words, 1 comment, on Oct 25 2:19 AM
    Silver trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]
  3. Drug Deal Gone Bad
    by CandyMan 100 words, 3 comments, on Nov 5 5:41 PM. In Contest, Starter
    Bronze trophy winner
    • Commented on by judge. [remove]

Entries [7]

1 - 7 of 7
  • A Beginning For Murder [contest entry]
    Amy was supposed to be dead. Her family decided it was better that way, so they 'killed' her. Now its her turn to seek her revenge.
    by Bloody-Ink 300 words, 2 comments, on Oct 25 11:28 AM. In Dark, Fiction, First person, Horror, Murder
    • Commented on by judge.
  • Drug House
    The small, square house was only a few feet away, yet my feet began to ache at the thought of trudgeing towards it. Something was wrong,... somthing wasn't right...1
    by Keirii 200 words, 1 comment, on Oct 30 11:59 PM
    • Commented on by judge.
  • Dust to Dust
    Anna sat next to the window at her boyfriend,Jack's home, she was waiting and watching for the cops. she knew only in her heart that this was wrong. Her boyfriend was killing people by their own accord. Suddenly Anna hears a
    by Sorceress13 100 words, 1 comment, on Nov 6 7:02 AM
    • Commented on by judge.
  • 2 Hours
    Mr.Sanchez likes going out to his favorite bar on Oak Sreet. He was driving home....Drunk to be exact everything he saw was a blur. He was
    by Dario101 100 words, 1 comment, on Nov 6 4:02 PM
    • Commented on by judge.

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  • CactusJack silver member
    November 5
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    Sounds like you already have a few ideas lined up. Although, they all kinda sound like the beginning of a Law&Order episode.

    • Colaca-Lily
      November 6
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      It's just ideas that I have lined up that might be easy for me to build up since they are broad and also, easy for them to start without making it too hard for me to build on.